I did a writers no no with this one. I didn't put my feelings aside as I wrote because I wanted to get something different down. I know I reed to revise, big time, but I want another writer's opinion before I do anything. I have ideas galore with this piece, but I think my mind needs a reality check. Any comments, suggestions, etc. you have would be most appreciated.

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