Thanks for your story for the Bard's Hall July 2025 contest. You did a good job incorporating the photo prompt into your story. There were good emotional elements in the story that tapped into the heartstrings. The story was sweet, inspirational and ended on a hopeful note. Well done!
Excellent story you have written. As I looked at the picture, I could see the inspiration coming. What could be better than having the same birthday as our wonderful country. Truly enjoyed reading it.
My father's fathers, first came to America back in 1607, and we have been living and dying for our country ever since. My 8th great-grandfather, John Thomas Clark, gave his all in 1623 in an American Indian attack outside what was Jamestown.
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THE STORY
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What a MOVIE that would make. Monty Pythonesque. 