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Message #1819885, posted on 11-24-08 @ 4:43 pm EST,
by: ~ Kate ~

Subject: Re: Re: He said, She said...

Quoting from Weekly Workout Exercise Seven...

"Show don’t tell – dialogue tags

Dialogue is a great way to show instead of tell. Many writers use the dreaded said. Nothing can be more irritating than reading those words over and over. To avoid that pitfall, share action or emotion instead.

She said could be changed to “Anna whispered”. He said could turn to “Tom whined as he started back for the house.” Both still tell who is speaking but say so much more. When you accent your dialogue with movements or mannerisms, you enhance your scenes and bring your characters to life.

In a dialogue exchange with only two speakers, it may not be necessary to use tags at all. If you make it clear who is speaking at the beginning, you can often leave them out completely."

I suppose everyone has different opinions about this, which is why I asked. Would love to hear some more.

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He said, She said... (11-24-08 9:18am)
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