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Sep 7, 2025 at 11:35am
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![]() Just a quick note to explain my choice. Chapter 1 was a bit too 'cluttered,' for lack of a better word. You were introducing so many characters in the first paragraph, I felt lost as I read along. Were they really necessary so early in the story? Perhaps, ... but perhaps not. And I liked the lighter touch when talking about the possible relationship between Piper and Taylor in your Alternate Chapter 1. |