A changeling spirit,
constantly evolving,
revolving around an inner core,
spinning forth legend and lore,
stories and lives
as I come to grips
with who and what I am,
have been and may be.
I am a phoenix:
rising ever above and beyond!
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Given: Jul 3, 2018 at 1:50am
Length: 1,402 Characters |
1,161 w/o WritingML
Hi!Fyn
I am taking part for July Challenge for "The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for July. It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Shattered Ice" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I really liked this poem because of the way you painted life with the breathtaking beauty of winter. You beautifully used the quote Snow provokes responses that reach right back to childhood. I like this epic poem. I like the little rhyming and how you ended the word “breathe” in every line, “for a brief moment I cannot breathe” “air trailing as they breathe.” “It takes more than air to breathe.”
I like the architecture of lines and shapes, scenes and stories. I feel that it wrote from life experience.
The poet uses the colors and shapes, sounds and smells, touch and feelings to create the images. For example “Crystal clings to every branch” “a sharp crack of winter’s whip” “Boots crunch, footstep designs break virgin white” “a crimson memory flash.”
I like the last stanza and I feel that this is positive. It packed with message.
Mina
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