A changeling spirit,
constantly evolving,
revolving around an inner core,
spinning forth legend and lore,
stories and lives
as I come to grips
with who and what I am,
have been and may be.
I am a phoenix:
rising ever above and beyond!
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Given: Jul 10, 2018 at 9:10am
Length: 1,586 Characters |
1,303 w/o WritingML
Hello Fyn,
I enjoyed reading your story. I am no expert and what's following is my humble review which you may choose to ignore.
Why I chose this item:
This is a part of Angel Army July Challenge and I needed to review something from your port. This was was pretty interesting.
My favorites parts:
I liked the magic in your story. It had that spark that Christmas brings, especially when Cara found out about the confettis.
Characters: The mother: A calm woman with cool nerves who knows how to handle her kids. Cara: For a ten-year old, she had her own way of getting things done. Santa: Well... It was great of him to find Cara's mother and inform her about the girl's wish.
StoryLine/Plot :
The plot was simple but had surprise not only for Cara but for us too. I read till the end to find out how it ended.
Action/Flow :
The story flowed smoothly till the end. The scenes were easily distinguishable and well formed.
Ending:
The end was full of smiles. It was wonderful and one could feel the magic you have woven in the story.
Overall impression:
I loved reading your piece.
A few Typos:
None that I noticed.
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