A changeling spirit,
constantly evolving,
revolving around an inner core,
spinning forth legend and lore,
stories and lives
as I come to grips
with who and what I am,
have been and may be.
I am a phoenix:
rising ever above and beyond!
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Given: Jul 12, 2018 at 2:49am
Length: 1,638 Characters |
1,322 w/o WritingML
Hello Fyn,
I enjoyed reading your story. I am no expert and what's following is my humble review which you may choose to ignore.
Why I chose this item:
This is a part of Angel Army July Challenge. I had to review something from your port and found this. The title is interesting and attracted my attetenion.
My favorites parts:
You have a lot of Santa stories in your port and each one of them are different. I liked how you have taken up a real situation and incorporated in in your story.
Characters:
You have brought out the characters well. Well there is nothing to say about Mr. and Mrs. Claus. The name itself is suffice.
StoryLine/Plot :
The plot was nice and refreshing. It gave me a vacationing feeling as if I went out with them.
Action/Flow :
The story flowed smoothly taking the reader along with it in a ride.
Ending:
The end was a happy one and what I liked best was your note
Overall impression:
It was a lovely spirited story and i liked it very much.
A few Typos:
There are a few punctuation missed. ”Besides,: "Besides, “Tis time: “'Tis time “Santa? Last year... : Who said this one? Clara or Fyndorian
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