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Summer Storm Open in new Window. [E]
Poetry depicting how I enjoy watching a summer storm and going to sleep listening to them.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Icecream* General Thoughts: After reading this poem, I checked the weather report hoping for storms. Tomorrow maybe! *Bigsmile* I love watching a storm roll in. I love the way the scent of the air changes and everything. I think you did a good job of capturing that electric excitement of a summer storm in your poem. And who doesn't sleep great when it's raining?

I really enjoyed how this poem had a beginning, middle, and end. It wrapped up so nicely. My favorite part was the second stanza. Those first ominous signs of a storm incoming were well-written. I also like the imagery and word choice behind this line: no clouds to challenge sunshine. I've definitely seen those days.

*Icecreamb* Suggestions: I think the flow of the poem is pretty smooth throughout, but there are a couple spots where the rhythm is off to me when I read the poem. Not sure if there's an extra syllable in those lines or if it's just the word choice that throws me off. For example, I hasten to the house for shelter doesn't flow as well for me in that stanza as the other lines do.

*Icecreamv* Conclusion: Overall, I think your poem achieves its purpose. As a fellow storm lover, I can see the imagery of this and I understand the enjoyment of watching a summer storm. Thanks for sharing your writing!

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My writing doesn't follow any set genre, it's interdependent of my mood and all that's taking place in life. I'm still finding myself, what I write constitutes the markers along the path of that journey. With time, many things will manifest in my work and perhaps I will pursue one or two genres. For now, it's not, "What type of writing is my passion?" "Writing is my passion."