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 Every Day Open in new Window. [18+]
He shows his love.
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Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about the love of a vampire.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the story the poem told and could easily see this vinyette playing out in my mind.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and is very visual.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Folded like origami in the hiding place" This is a good visual using a good economy of words which heightens suspense. Well done.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader and keeps them reading. I want to find out what happens. The title is appropriate to the poem. Nice expression.

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