Hi Amethyst Angel 🌼

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2025" .


Positives

I thought you did a great job with the imagery in this poem. Several of the lines really stood out based on your descriptive word choices. In particular, I thought "Dreams I wake up apologizing to God for" and "Nightmares illuminate what I deny" were both really visceral and engaging. The Rebel Poetry Contest has always been one of my favorite poetry contests (when it runs) and I think this is a worthy entry that has a lot of potential. Well done!


Suggestions

Structurally, there were a couple of places where the construction of the poem occasionally disrupted the read for me. While the visual appeal is there, breaking "No one guesses monstrous insanity / lurks beneath:" across two lines felt a little jarring too me, and earlier in the poem the "I wear a mask each day: / Good girl, proper, angelic" felt a little jarring to go from a narrative construction line to one that just lists three nouns/adjectives.


Overall

Overall, I think you did a great job with this poem. It was very visual, and was a great fit for the prompt. Well done!


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Jeff
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