 First Impressions:
That’s a lot of newsletters!  It’s not a new story and it has obviously had a lot of attention, so there is probably nothing I can say you haven’t heard already. It was a very creepy horror story, and all the time, I wasn’t sure the narrator was actually awake. Perhaps it was wishful thinking on her behalf, but there was a dreamlike quality to this tale that enabled me to hope that, despite the assurances from the hooded figure, she was having a nightmare.
 Suggestions:
I did my rituals, took a shower, and dressed in my sleeping gown I went to bed.
I think this sentence would work better as two, with a period after “gown”. You could add a word to the second sentence: “Then I went to bed.”
My dog Arie already was sleeping on one of the pillows
You need a comma before and after “Arie”.
I could not breath properly
Just a typo, “breathe”.
 Final Thoughts:
This was quite a creative story with an unusual twist - I hadn’t anticipated that this was going to happen, although with hindsight, there were a few references to the dog that might have been cleverly placed hints. A very disturbing tale - I enjoyed the read!
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