Hello iKïyå§ama-Happy 25th!

Thank you for taking the time to enter the May 2025 round of the "Invalid Item" .

Enclosed please find the following official judges' review, for your consideration.


Positives

I'm really impressed by the way you were able to include so many different specific word prompts into a cohesive story while still making it feel natural and authentic. The characters were also really unique and vibrant. Great job!


Suggestions

The split between the two parts of the story felt a bit abrupt. In a piece this short, I think I would have preferred to have that expository information in the first part more naturally woven into the cohesive narrative of the second part, rather than a standalone prelude that forces the reader to reset and refocus after a few hundred words.


Overall

Overall, I think this is a really strong Writer's Cramp entry that does a really impressive job of incorporating a difficult prompt. Nice work!


I hope you've found this review helpful, and thank you again for entering the contest!

Respectfully,

Jeff is Gru in #2343485
"Rating & Reviewing Philosophy" 

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .