Greetings, Jeff 
I discovered this fun piece via the Random Read and Review button.
Being a softie, I kinda skimmed lightly through it, looking for the "punchline" which I suspected was in there somewhere towards the end. Knowing your style, I found the ending to be satisfying and amusing. (There wouldn't have been much point to the story otherwise, imho...  )
I would recommend using a larger font size, and perhaps adding a cover art to give it a little pizzazz, but aside from that I can't think of anything to improve this straightforward yarn. I can almost see Anton's obnoxious smirk as he fishes for prey. I'm a little confused by the combination of both "urban camo" and "vampire hunting regalia," but that's my own cultural aversion to the subject 
Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing 
 My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!"  .
 You responded to this review 07/26/2025 @ 2:56am EDT |
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