Hello, Fyn, aka Fyn !


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your "Afterwards..." poem today.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end every time.

Congratulations to you on staying on track with the Promptly Poetry Challenge!


MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, and in accordance with Writing.Com guidelines.

I found your poem in the "Promptly Poetry" forum today, and it was already pretty late and I hadn't done my daily review here yet. I love your writing in general, so your user name drew me in and I clicked and read your poem and enjoyed it greatly, so I decided to give you a review as a little hope-it-brightens-your-day gift. Happiest summer wishes to you and best wishes on your writing future too!

I loved your poem so much. It said a lot in under twenty five words (the max for today's prompt, and extra kudos to you for already having done it!), generated a feeling of compassion and camaraderie in me as I read it, and felt like just the right reminder for my mood tonight.

I thought the free verse form worked well with the message of your poem.

My favorite line was the "warms cold with new dreams," line. I thought this was a neat and novel way to express what you were sharing.

I thought you did a great job with the prompt for week fifty one of the current round of the Promptly Poetry Challenge. I think I still have to write poems for weeks 20-32? Plus this week, and next week... all before next week ends. It's much smarter to stay on track, like I think you have. I didn't double check, but I seem to remember seeing your entries every time I added one of mine. Well done!

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "Afterwards" poem.

I thought the death, and experience genres you selected for this poem were appropriate matches for it.

Time really does make a difference... which we can tell after enough has passed, if we're blessed with enough of it. Wishing you a big hug!


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's wonderful as it is. Well done!

As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.


CONCLUSION:

I enjoyed reading your "Afterwards" poem, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, this summer, and always!

PWheeler










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