Hello Jeff,

you have vividly described the character's shocked reaction to the change in climate, which was unexpected.

The beginning-
Gil's enthusiasm and excitement are sincerely positive. I can see his readiness to exchange cold for warmth.
"sunny beaches and ocean breezes" aptly mirror California.

The comment on the advantages of computers is inserted with ease. It is so true.

The middle-
Here is where the fun begins (for the reader).
"Glancing down at the legend on the map, he realized that the ocean was over 120 miles away from where he’d be living!" Oh no.

Poor Gil! was my reaction at his confused state and absolute disappointment. I can imagine his utter helplessness. Yet, he had to cross that unforeseen bridge.
The turmoil in his mind is well brought out.

The end-
I like the way he takes the situation in stride. I would call him sportive judging by the way in which he faces the odds, like a horse clearing the obstacles without breaking its rhythm.

Lessons well learnt.

You told me what to do under similar circumstances.
Interesting!

Write on!





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