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 This is review of " Darcy & Caroline"  .
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[ First Thoughts ]
I was a bit apprehensive about reading this story as I cherish Jane Austen's novel very much. However, I am glad to have read your work, as it is a vivid glimpse into a world where pragmatism won over feelings of the heart.
It was easy to see the care in which you crafted this story to remain true to the characters while writing this hypothetical scenario. Darcy and Caroline did what expected of them and married to keep the status quo. I could easily believe this is happening had the main characters of the novel had not been brave. You did a remarkable job.
[ Errors ]
I could find no grammatical errors. Great job! 
[ Suggestions ]
This story is structured well and has even pacing throughout. I have no notes or suggestions.
[ Favorite Line/Segment ]
"His heart remained untouched, locked away in memories of wit, warmth, and the playful impertinence of a woman who had once challenged him as no other ever had."
You never mention Elizabeth by name, but she haunts the narrative all the same. It is particularly true with this line. Darcy's longing for another choice over the one he picked is present in all he does. In the same manner, Caroline yearns for the same thing he does, making them a match to the bitter end.
[ Conclusion ]
Even though Caroline is a minor antagonist in the story of Pride and Prejudice, I cannot help but feel a bit sad for her here. Both she and Darcy will live a passionless and loveless life together because they chose to do what is expected of them by society. In a way, she got everything she wished for, except the one thing she truly craved. And he will always be left to wonder what could have been with Elizabeth. A tragic romance, indeed.
Thank you for sharing your excellent work. Write on!
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