I really liked the mythology and the storytelling in this piece. It kind of remind's me of Marvel's Ghost Rider character, who seeks to claim the souls of the condemned. You did a great job of establishing Damian's backstory and depicting the abyssal horror that comes forth to answer his call.

I don't have any specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece.

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