I thought you did a great job with the details in this piece. From the nuances of your brother's name to details about the way you grew up, to the unfortunate estrangement that you're now experiencing, you did a great job of inviting the reader into your story and helping them get to know you a little better. Well done!

I wish I had some suggestions for improvement, but I think you did a great job with this piece. It was well written and engaging.

Overall, I'd like to thank you for sharing this personal piece of writing with us. It was an enjoyable if bittersweet read. Nice job!