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 | Recipe for Vampire  [13+] Round Four Winner for Witches Corner Weekly Contest  |
| (4.0)  A review from "Invalid Item"  First Impressions: This story took me by surprise in the best way. I thought I was getting a tense little bar confrontation, the kind where a date goes horribly wrong because of some thugs causing trouble. Instead, halfway through, the whole thing turned into supernatural chaos with witches, vampires and a ball of burning light that wiped out an entire biker gang in seconds. I had no idea we were heading in that direction, which made the twist fun. Evan was actually very relatable. He was doing his best to look brave and collected, even though his insides were melting, and I liked the way his reactions stayed believable while the world around him went crazy. Lana, on the other hand, stole the story. She went from slightly nervous date to confident witch in about two sentences, and I liked how unfazed she was once she committed to handling things herself. The reveal that she knew something was off, but not quite what, made the whole sequence feel a bit more believable and gave her a nice sense of agency.  Suggestions: Technically, the story was solid and I didn't notice any errors. If I had one suggestion, it would be about the pacing. The supernatural switch happened very suddenly, and while it was enjoyable, it might work even better with a bit more build up or a hint earlier in the story. The biker group also went from threatening to ashes in the blink of an eye, which left almost no space to let the tension settle before it was over. That said, this is quite an old story (the ‘Read & Review’ feature doesn’t always pick new items) so you’re probably not interested in editing this.  Final Thoughts: Overall, I enjoyed the story a lot. It was chaotic and completely unafraid to combine ordinary date night awkwardness with flaming vampires and secret witches. By the time Lana suggested choosing the next restaurant, I was fully on her side. If Evan knows what is good for him, he will let her handle the supernatural threats and the dinner plans from now on.
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