Hello,

Thank you for entering the November 2025 round of "Invalid Item" !


Positives

I thought you did a really good job incorporating the prompts into this story. That was a difficult prompt with a lot of moving parts, and you successfully wove them into a narrative effectively given the word count restrictions. The keywords felt both smoothly incorporated and crucial to the story. Well done!


Suggestions

The backstory of Melissa and Audrey killing Whittaker was a little confusing in terms of how they actually carried it out. So much of the backstory's narrative emphasizes that Whittaker is the town's golden boy (a celebrity, basically), and on the night where he's ostensibly at the height of his fame and prominence, he's killed and his body disappeared. I was really hoping for more by way of explanation than "so they buried it all." Just a few key details would go a long way toward helping flesh out this backstory a little.


Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed this story. It was well written, engaging, and a great take on the prompt. Nice work!


I hope you've found this review helpful, and thanks again for taking the time to enter this round of the contest!

Sincerely,

Jeff
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