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Given: Dec 10, 2025 at 5:17pm
Length: 1,440 Characters |
1,307 w/o WritingML
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
An intriguing poem with a haunting invitation.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the imagery the poem evoked. I could picture, a curious little girl, debating in my mind if I should take up the invitation.
STRUCTURE
This is a kyrielle sonnet with structure explained as a footnote in the poem. This is very helpful, especially to newer community members or newer poets.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: Welcome to wondrous wonderland, Come deeper down the rabbit hole," I enjoyed the alliteration here using the "W" sound. When I read this I thought of place that's full of imagination. I guess the question is whose imagine. The invitation to go deeper rabbit hole plays the reader's curiosity well. Lots of good emotion here - #1 curiosity #2 daring #3 apprehension.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening invites the reader in with a warm welcome. The title is an appropriate fit for the poem. Nice beats, strong alliteration, spot on kyrielle - all solid techniques that make this poem shine.
Review #4847249
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
WHAT I LIKED
STRUCTURE
You responded to this review 12/11/2025 @ 11:12am EST