Kiya is a young woman with many interests. She's got a degree in Computer Science and Registered Nursing. She's an avid reader and considers Stephen King one of her favorite authors.
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Positives
I thought you did a great job with the characterization and descriptive details in this piece. It was just over a thousand words but still contained enough information to make it feel like a fully-fleshed out, realistic story. Well done!
Suggestions
The only small suggestion I have is that having two "M" names (and referring to the teacher by her first name like the other students) was at time a bit confusing. I kept mixing up whether Maryann or Margery was the teacher. It might read a little cleaner if there were more distinct names (or a different naming strategy like calling the teacher "Ms./Miss/Mrs. [Last Name]" for a bit of variety.
Overall
Overall, this was a well-written, entertaining read. Nice job!
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Kiya is a young woman with many interests. She's got a degree in Computer Science and Registered Nursing.
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