 First Impressions:
This is one of those scenarios that leaves the readers thinking ‘What if…?’ Many people have been speculating about a first contact with something we weren’t previously aware of, something alien from space or even something on Earth that we didn’t know existed. I’m not sure what exactly this portal was and where it led, but it was alien to the people on our planet. I had to laugh at the "unicorn adjacent quadrupeds with anomalous cranial protrusions." That sounded exactly like the kind of politically correct description people would come up with, and strangely, it made the story very relatable and ‘real’ despite what it was actually saying.
Dennis watched the spectacle from a distance. He didn’t come across like the kind of person who would want to see it with his own eyes and get the t-shirt - he was happy staying far away from it, but he still wanted to know what was going on. I would probably be a Dennis in that situation so I identified with him quite strongly.
Suggestions:
The story was very polished and I didn’t notice any technical errors. I do have one question though. There was a little aside that told the readers He just wanted a job. At first I thought this meant he was going to get involved and help in some way, but it didn’t, so I wasn’t sure how this comment related to the story overall. It’s a small detail but it tore me out of the story a little, so I was wondering if I missed something.
Final thoughts:
This was a fun story that started with one strange event but got a lot stranger by the end, almost like you were thinking how you could make it even more surreal. Not that I’m complaining - I thought this was a very entertaining tale, and I enjoyed the read!
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