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Swan and Shadow
This is my favorite concrete poem. It can be difficult to understand at first especially since there is no punctuation but if you put a little effort and some punctuation into it, this poem is truly beautiful and makes use of visual and mental images in order to emphasize it's beauty and meaning.


Swan and Shadow
By John Hollander



              Dusk
         Above the
   water hang the
                 loud
                flies
             Here
           O so
           gray
          then
        What               A pale signal will appear
        When            Soon before its shadow fades
       Where         Here in this pool of opened eye
          In us     No Upon us As at the very edges
           of where we take shape in the dark air
            this object bares its image awakening
             ripples of recognition that will
              brush darkness up into light
even after this bird this hour both drift by atop the perfect sad instant now
              already passing out of sight
             toward yet-untroubled reflection
           this image bears its object darkening
         into memorial shades Scattered bits of
        light     No of water Or something across
      water        Breaking up No Being regathered
       soon           Yet by then a swan will have
        gone                Yes out of mind into what
          vast
           pale
            hush
               of a
              place
                past
 sudden dark as
         if a swan
             sang





If you noticed there are words that are capitalized and they show the beginning of sentences. It is interesting to note that there are more words capitalized in the bottom part of the poem. Maybe they are trying to indicate ripples in the swan's shadow. Once punctuation is placed in the poem you get the sense that there are actually two voices(maybe more). To put it simply, there is one that questions and one that provides the answers.

I like that this poem talks about the last moments before the sun sets, dusk. I love dusk. Dusk is my favorite part of the day and the shortest part; it passes by very fast....it is like the day's swan song.

My favorite part of the poem is where the swan passes into shadow. How he leaves off talking of the swan and enters in to the shadow and describes that to us in such a beautiful manner.

There is so much to be said about this poem. There is so much going on.
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