Poetic Tides Through Time (Book)

Poetic Tides Through Time

March 2017
Entries #1-#33

April 2017
Entries #35-65

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

Katya the Poet

Apr 30, 2017 at 7:23pm
In response to "Beyond Babylon"

I have so enjoyed reading your work and seeing the great variety of your poems this month! Loved learning about these various forms you tried!

Joy

Apr 30, 2017 at 2:39pm
In response to "Beyond Babylon"

Nice work with the form and I believe the poem has more to do with the love of a horse or the horse riding, and I felt a certain sadness at the last stanza.

"Rusty remnant remains" great refrain with alliteration and meaning for each reader to interpret from himself or herself. I can see from the meaning why you changed the refrain in the last few stanzas and added it back in question form.

It has been a wonderful April, and I felt such pleasure reading your poems. I hope you continue writing poetry throughout the coming months.

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Joy

Apr 30, 2017 at 2:22pm
In response to "Imagine..."

That poor newsman! I bet giving the bad news hurt him more than the news itself.

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Katya the Poet

Apr 28, 2017 at 10:29pm
In response to "A memory..."

Lovely poem. So glad you tried the ghazal!

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alfred booth, wanbli ska

Apr 28, 2017 at 12:20pm
In response to "A memory..."

The form is perfectly rendered, thank you for trying it and discovering it is not as difficult as it seems.

On a purely poetic note, I would change the title so it doesn't include the all-important rhyme word "cherry" which is the build-up of the poem. For the same reason in the fourth stanza, I would not yet unveil the true name of the fruit, but let that linger for the last line of the poem. Also, "bore large fruit cherries" is redundant, as I know of no meat or vegetable that is also called a cherry without cherry being a variety as with the tomato, which does not grow on a tree! I know why you used the redundancy, for a syllable count, but it doesn't work. "Bore large round cherries" is an easy solution to correct this particular situation. "Bore large heart shaped fruit" would let you leave the cherry surprise for the end.

A tiny bit of nit-picking.
As for the rhyme "clary" the only definition I find is that of a type of herb. Difficult to find in a tree. Had the same problem not knowing any definition of "eyrie" but since you speak of the curved branch seat in the second line, a large bird's nest can apply here.

Write on! Ghazals are fun!

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Joy

Apr 27, 2017 at 10:40pm
In response to "Joker"

Who doesn't love a horse! Lovely!

alfred booth, wanbli ska

Apr 27, 2017 at 12:39pm
In response to "Joker"

Lovely and lyrical.

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Joy

Apr 26, 2017 at 7:27pm
In response to "Perpetual Motion "

Yes, ten years is a long time. I love the part after "I'll face the fear"

Joy